Thursday, April 9, 2015

Self-Motivating




     I got this from Top achievement.  It's a good site to visit if you need a pick-me-up, or direction in life.  It's not author-specific, just motivation for life.

No one can motivate anyone to do anything. All a person can do for another is
provide them with incentives to motivate themselves. Here are ten very effective
strategies to help you get up and get moving toward actualizing your enormous,
untapped potential.

* Be willing to leave your comfort zone. The greatest barrier to achieving your
potential is your comfort zone. Great things happen when you make friends with your discomfort zone.

* Don’t be afraid to make mistakes. Wisdom helps us avoid making mistakes and comes from making a million of them.
* Don’t indulge in self-limiting thinking. Think empowering, expansive thoughts.
*Choose to be happy. Happy people are easily motivated. Happiness is your
birthright so don’t settle for anything else.

* Spend at least one hour a day in self-development. Read good books or listen to inspiring tapes. Driving to and from work provides an excellent opportunity to listen to self-improvement tapes.
* Train yourself to finish what you start. So many of us become scattered as we
try to accomplish a task. Finish one task before you begin another.

* Live fully in the present moment. When you live in the past or the future you
aren’t able to make things happen in the present.

* Commit yourself to joy. C.S. Lewis once said, “Joy is the serious business of
heaven.”

* Never quit when you experience a setback or frustration. Success could be just
around the corner.

* Dare to dream big dreams. If there is anything to the law of expectation then we are moving in the direction of our dreams, goals and expectations.
The real tragedy in life is not in how much we suffer, but rather in how much we
miss, so don’t miss a thing.

Charles Dubois once said, “We must be prepared, at any moment, to sacrifice who we are for who we are capable of becoming.”

Wednesday, April 8, 2015

The Undecideds Chapt. 5



     Once again, this is all very rough work.  I hardly read this over before posting it, and there are a lot of parts I would change, but I've got to get back to my other book, so here's chapter 5 of the book I'm writing with my daughter.

Chapter 5

                The rest of that school day seemed to go on forever.  Rachel  had missed her Angelology, and Predatory classes, but she felt confident that she knew enough about those two guilds that she wouldn’t really be behind.  She walked in halfway through her Math Class, but the teacher didn’t say a word.  Rachel figured that the teacher had probably heard the gossip about the Co-Leaders of the Angel Guild showing up, and didn’t want to have any part of that trouble.  Math was easy, and this class seemed to be review compared to her private tutelage.  The new student’s assembly and orientation was next on her schedule.  Rachel wondered if the principal had had enough time to compose herself after the encounter with her parents.  She would find out soon enough.
The entire school met in the gymnasium for the assembly.  The second year kids were singing the school anthem when Rachel and the rest of the first year students arrived.  The gymnasium was enormous.  Rachel found herself lost in awe, temporarily forgetting her misery.  She and the rest of the first year students filed in, most with only a ball of fur in tow.  The second year students had a wide variety of spirit beasts.  Some were fully developed, but stayed at Undecided’s Intermediate because they didn’t want to switch schools half-way through.  Most, though, only had partially developed beasts.  Balls of fur with lion’s faces, or legs and no face, or goat heads, or arms, were all hooting and howling at the new students.  The gym was noise in a box.
There were cheerleaders on the basketball court rallying the crowd.  There was a mascot of a dragon, which was the school’s mascot because it was a legendary beast that nobody had had for thousands of years, dancing around the court.  It must have taken three or four students to operate the enormous costume.  Rachel smiled, in spite of her horrible day.
Once all the students were seated the principal took the pulpit and everyone quieted down.  Principal Winehart looked to be put back together as she welcomed the new students to Undecided’s Intermediate School.  She was halfway through her welcome speech when someone yelled, “Principal Whiner Baby.”  The rest of the school burst out in laughter.  Rachel’s cheeks burned.  The Principal looked to have been physically knocked back a step, and Rachel thought she saw her bottom lip quiver.
Principal Winehart smoothed her grey skirt down at her hips and took a step back up to the microphone.  A deep scowl settled on her face as she scanned the student body.  Most of the kids quieted down.  A few of the older boys were chanting, “Whiner Baby,” but eventually that too died out.  The Principal found Rachel in the crowd, and held up her hand to quiet the rest of the students.  All of the other students raised their hands and shut their mouths.  Rachel figured it must have been a sign to be quiet in the school.  They never needed such tactics in the Angel’s Elementary School she attended.  She shyly raised her hand and looked down at her feet to avoid eye contact with the principal.
“Rachel Sie,” the principal said in a commanding voice.  “Come to the pulpit at once!”
The students all around Rachel looked at her.  She felt her ears burning.  She didn’t want to, but felt herself stand up and start walking towards the pulpit, just the same.  She never took her eyes from her feet, but she knew that everyone was looking at her.  A few of the children whispered things to one another, but mostly the gym was dead silent.  Rachel could hear her heart beating in her ears with a loud whooshing sound.  After what seemed like the longest walk in her entire life, she found herself standing in front of the pulpit at the center of the gymnasium.
Principal Winehart covered the microphone with her hand and leaned around the pulpit towards Rachel.  “Been talking about what happened in my office, have we?”
Rachel looked up in shock, shaking her head, “No, I swe…”
“Hush,” the principal cut her off.  “I’ll have no lies to save your hide.” 
Rachel had thought the principal looked pleasant, and even beautiful in her own way, before.  Now, she looked mean.  And she wore a scowl that looked to be easily brought forth.  Her cat was sitting at her heels with the hair on its back raised.  A low moan resonating from the cat made Rachel sick with worry about what Principal Winehart had in store for her.
The principal took her hand from the microphone and looked back towards the students gathered at the assembly.  “This is Rachel Sie, daughter of Saul Sie and Claudia Sie, the Co-Leaders of the Angel Guild.”  She motioned to one of the other teachers, and he brought a sawhorse looking stand in front of the pulpit.  “Bend over it, Miss Sie.”
Rachel didn’t know what the sawhorse stand was, but she knew she didn’t want to bend over it.  Once again, she felt herself walking over to it anyway.  She felt numb.  She bent over the sawhorse with her face a bright red hue.  The principal walked around the pulpit and behind her.  Suddenly, Rachel felt a sharp pain on her rear-end.  She cried out, instinctively, and stood up slightly.  The male teacher pushed her shoulders back down over the sawhorse just as she received another thrashing on her rear-end.  Rachel tried to cover her bottom with her hands, but the rod struck her hands instead, causing even greater pain than her bottom, so she quickly moved them.  Principal Winehart struck her ten times in total.  By the sixth lash, Rachel was bawling.  The lashings hurt, but more than anything she was humiliated.  She had never been spanked growing up.  The Angel Guild’s elementary schools would never dream of striking a child.  Physical violence was considered barbaric to all in the Angel Guild, but here, they obviously had different ideas about it.
When the ordeal was over, the principal courtly said, “Stop your blubbering and return to your seat.”  Rachel tried to stifle her crying, but couldn’t seem to stop.  Her breath came in racking sobs as she tried with all her might to stop crying.  A few of the kids snickered at her, but most sat upright in fear of the horror they had just witnessed.  Obviously, some of them weren’t use to physical discipline either.  When she reached her seat, she sat down quickly, trying to hide from the thousands of eyes watching her.  The moment her bottom hit the seat she cried out in shock from the painful welts on her bottom.
Principal Winehart slowly walked back behind the pulpit and stood staring at Rachel until she looked up.  She was still holding the thin rod she had used to lash Rachel’s bottom.  Rachel felt angry,  humiliated, and scared all at once.  The principal held her gaze for a while before a self-satisfied smile crossed her lips.
She looked around at the rest of the student body and said, “She has the most powerful and influential parents among you, but she is not above me in my own school.  Just the rest of you think about that the next time you think to open your mouths.”  The gym was silent.  Even the second-year students were sobered by what they had witnessed.  The principal finished her speech and sat down.  Several other faculty members spoke to the students, but Rachel didn’t hear a word of what was said.  She sat in her seat in a daze.  Sometime the students would clap.  Sometimes they would laugh, but Rachel just stared at her feet, wishing the day would end.
After the assembly the students returned to their classes.  Rachel noticed that they studiously ignored her.  Some went so far as to turn their heads away from her as they walked past.  Rachel filed out of the gym with the rest of the students, and into the hall.  She had no idea where her next class was, nor did she care.  She just started walking down the hall with the flow of students leaving the gym. 
David found her and asked her something.  His voice sounded like it was coming from the opening of a deep well.  She turned to him and asked, “What?”
David smiled his goofy smile, and took her notebook from her hand, opening it up to her schedule.  “Ah, economics.  I know where that is, I’ll walk you.”
Rachel nodded numbly, and walked with David to her next class.  He was jabbering on about how he was sorry the principal had done that to her and how he knew she wasn’t use to that kind of punishment.  She hardly heard a word of what he was saying.  When they got to her economics class, David said his goodbyes and left her standing in the doorway.  Rachel could see the kids inside pointing and whispering to one another.  Tears filled her eyes, and she turned and ran down the hall.
She bumped into several students along the way, they yelled at her, but she didn’t stop nor did she hear a word of what they were saying.  She ran until she was at the front entrance of the school.  She saw the light of day beaming in through the glass doors of the large entryway, and ran for them.  Before she knew it, she was halfway home, and her lungs were burning with the effort to keep her panting.  She had a painful stitch in her side, and had to stop to catch her breath.  Her heaving panting turned into sobs, and she fell to her hands and knees, half crying and half gasping for air.
She cried for a long while before she ran out of tears.  Once she was able to stop, she felt something deep within her.  It wasn’t anger, or hurt, or sadness, but it was a powerful feeling.  It was a feeling of determination and strength.  She had never felt the likes of this before.  She knew, without a shadow of a doubt, that she would never cry again.  She wiped her nose on the back of her hand and picked herself up.  With shaky arms, she wiped away the streams of tears from her face.  Some had already dried to salty streaks, but she didn’t care anymore. 
Her parents were the cause of all of this, she was certain.  She wanted nothing more to do with the politics of the Angel Guild.  She marched the rest of the way home, knowing nobody would be there.  When she got home, she went to her room and started packing her things.  She didn’t really have any idea where she was going, but she knew she didn’t want to be there anymore.  Once she had a bag full of clothes, she went to the kitchen, and got some bread, and peanut butter and jelly.  She stuffed them in with her clothes and zipped the bag closed.  She didn’t want there to be any question as to where she went, so she decided to leave a note.  She wanted her parents to know that they had brought this on themselves.  She wanted them to hurt like she hurt, know that they had driven her away.
She put the pen to the paper and started to write:
Dear Mom and Dad,
                I cannot bear to live with the Angel Guild’s dictates anymore.  They seem to be constantly contradicting themselves, and I’m tired of hearing them all the time.  I can’t do anything right! I’m tired of feeling smothered all the time, so I’m running away.
                You ruined my life today when you came to my school and threatened my principal.  She struck me ten times with a rod in front of the entire school.  I have never been so humiliated in all of my life, and it’s all your fault.  I can never forgive you.  This is just the last thing in a long line of horrible things I’ve had to endure because I’m the daughter of the Angel Guild leaders.  The Angel Guild is full of hypocrites and so are its leaders.
                Don’t bother coming to look for me.  I’m never coming home, and I don’t want  to have anything to do with this family, or this guild ever again.
                Rachel
                Rachel read the letter over several times, thinking about changing different parts, but finally decided to just keep it the way she wrote it.  She picked up her bag and walked to the door.  Her stomach gave a little flurry when she opened the door and looked back into her house for the last time.  She took a deep breath, and closed the door behind her.


Tuesday, April 7, 2015

Roman (Saints and Sinners)



      Roman (Saints and Sinners) by Kennedy Streath (Nya Rawlyns)is a YA Romance/Dark Fantasy.  I'm not exactly sure why Mrs. Rawlyns felt she needed a different pen name for this book, except that maybe she wanted to have a different standing for YA than her usual adult work.  And I do mean "Adult Work".  She has a score of Adult Romance novels out, so going into this, I was very wary.  I don't mind Romance, and I don't even mind a sex scene or two in a novel if they aren't too explicit, but when the whole book is smut, I can't turn the page.  The only reason I agreed to review this work was that it was YA, and I hoped that the smut would be toned down for the kiddos.  

     Okay, before I start the review, I need to get a monkey off my back.  I'm part of so many writer's forums, blogs, support groups, and Facebook pages I can't even keep track of most of them.  I always see the question, "Why don't publishers like the omniscient narrative voice?"  Well, I've read a couple of professionally published works where they author, with, I'm sure, the help of editors, made it work.  I've also been reading a lot of indie work from authors who don't have the benefit of all of that professional help.  Omniscient Narrative is very, VERY, hard to do well.  It can be very confusing and jarring to read when not done well.  I'm all but convinced that a single author, no matter how talented, can not accomplish the task alone.  It's the biggest critique I have of this book.  Don't use an omniscient voice.  When I have to go back an read something over again because I don't know who is talking/thinking what, I get put in a surly mood.  Especially when thoughts are italicized without lead-in or lead-out tags annotating who is speaking/thinking.  TJ's thoughts are thrown in in the middle of other character's sentences.  There are better ways to portray thoughts and feelings.

     Okay, on to the review.  Theresa Jane (TJ) just lost her no-good mother, and is forced to move in with her no-good father who abandoned them when she was five.  Typical premise for this type of YA novel.  

     A strange young man named Roman is living with her father.  He's on probation for a crime which has been sealed, and even the police don't seem to want to talk about.  The only advice her brother tells her before shipping off is to stay away from the boy.  You know the old saying, "the best way to get a girl to do something is to tell her not to do it"?  Well, it works.  The mysterious bad boy is an immediate obsession for TJ, even against her own will.  She finds herself drawn to him, wondering about everything about him.  Her dreams are even riddled with the essence of him.  That part is borderline too adult for a YA book, but I digress.  

     It becomes quickly apparent, however, that there is more going on with Roman than just your typical street tough teen.  The lead-ins for this are actually brilliant.  I have to tip my hat to Mrs. Rawlyns for not giving away too much too fast.  The characters are built very carefully, and even with the whinny, poor-picked-on-me, school girl premise, I didn't hate TJ.  She's not completely self-absorbed like most YA protagonists seem to be.  I'm certain the YA audience will love her.

     There are strange things happening in the mine just outside of town.  And the towns people all refer to it as, "the same thing that happened four years ago".  Four years ago is about the time Roman showed up.  There is also a dark contract involved...

     The story is actually quite good.  The characters are well developed.  I cringed a little whenever things heated up between Roman and TJ, just because of the other books Mrs. Rawlyns has written, and she did a pretty good job staving off the inevitable, but, right towards the end, she gave in to her writing habits.  A couple of sixteen year-olds going at it... It was kind of a shame because the rest of the book was rather good.  I don't think teens need more sex and passion.  That one little slip, in my opinion, made the book unsuitable for YA.  Even though it wasn't too explicit.  So, that's my only other criticism; write for kids, or write for adults.  Don't put too many adult ideas into kids' minds who can barely contain their hormones as it is.

     I would have given this book 4-5 stars if not for the end.  As it stands  I give it


Monday, April 6, 2015

Meet the Mormons


     Meet the Mormons is a documentary which follows the lives of six incredible LDS members, introducing the world to everyday Mormons and dispelling a lot of rumors or myths about the members of the LDS church.

     I bought this movie for my family for Easter.  As a member of The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints, I may be a bit biased in this review, but I will try to be as objective as possible.

     Anytime I see the truly good works people (and I mean any people from any background) do, I get a little misty-eyed.  There is so much pain and hurt in the world.  The news is full of the most horrific stories you can imagine.  It's good to take a step back and remember that there are incredible people walking on the same soil the terrorists, arsonists, rapists, murderers, and thieves.  the difference is that the news reporters are looking for stories which will shock the reader, not acts of kindness and good deeds.

     In Meet the Mormons, we get an insight into the lives of six people who have done incredible things for the world around them.  Some affected the lives of countless generations, like the candy bomber, and others to just provide for their beloved children, like the single mother at the end.  The film does not preach about the LDS church, rather it follows the lives of a few members.  Anyone, religious or not, would enjoy this film.  It's about people overcoming their environment and circumstances to give something back to the world.

     When I first saw this in the theater I didn't know anything about it other than that it was a film about LDS members.  I actually didn't even know it was a documentary, so I was expecting something totally different than what I saw.  I was pleasantly surprised.  I think you will be, too.

     I give this film